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    Value proposition
    Jake Gardner
    Participant
    Sep 4, 2023

    What do you think of this:

    <p style=”margin: 0in; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 11.0pt;”>We help business owners save time & money by implementing technology solutions</p>
    I am also working on a few others for targetting different industries & also for different products. I was also messing around with the other type, but I think it comes across way to wordy and I cant figure out how to make it sound good.
    <p style=”margin: 0in; font-family: Calibri; font-size: 11.0pt;”>I help businesses increase security & productivity by implementing technology solutions. Unlike traditional IT Support providers that bill for time we provide fixed fee support services where we proactively work on your systems to prevent the issues happening in the first place.</p>

    #9515747
    Jake Gardner
    Participant
    Sep 4, 2023
    Jake Gardner Sep 4, 2023

    We help business owners save time & money by implementing technology solutions

    I am also working on a few others for targetting different industries & also for different products. I was also messing around with the other type, but I think it comes across way to wordy and I cant figure out how to make it sound good.

    I help businesses increase security & productivity by implementing technology solutions. Unlike traditional IT Support providers that bill for time we provide fixed fee support services where we proactively work on your systems to prevent the issues happening in the first place.

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    Will Barron
    Keymaster
    Sep 6, 2023
    Will Barron Sep 6, 2023

    We help business owners save time & money by implementing technology solutions

    We need to get more specific.

    • What are the properties of your ICP? What specific business owners?
    • Choose one – time or money.
    • What are the benefits of that?
    • What solutions?
    • How do you implement them?

    I help businesses increase security & productivity by implementing technology solutions. Unlike traditional IT Support providers that bill for time we provide fixed fee support services where we proactively work on your systems to prevent the issues happening in the first place.

    You’re right that it’s too wordy but it’s much more specific than your other example.

    Something more like this? –

    I help [specific] businesses increase productivity. Unlike traditional IT Support providers that bill for time we provide fixed fee support services and proactively solve potential issues before they effect productivity.

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