Email #2
- You’ve tried the subject line nicely into the first line of the email. It’d just try and make it a little more concise.
- Rather than “odds are”, I’d make a bolder claim.
Subject:
NAME – Leak?
Email:
Hi NAME,
Like every other corporate in Pharma, {{ company.name }} is leaking money by overpaying for telecom services.
This is the norm, not the exception.
Everyone puts off fixing the leak as it’s not urgent.
Then a few years go by and most CFOs get knots in their stomach when they see what they could have saved if they’d have taken action earlier.
Would you like me to share how I can save you 27%-38% on your telecom bill with just a couple of clicks?
Thanks,
