Some thoughts –
- Nobody cares (I do…) about your boo-hoo redundancy story. Remove that.
- First line should be your value prop to the company. Then hitting the targets. Nothing else realllllly matters.
I thought I was going to have more feedback but that’s basically it.
FYI your cover letter and CV get ripped apart with a bunch of SaaS and then delivered in a simple email to the hiring manager alongside a shitload of other candidates.
They then click a tick/cross to whittle down the candidates from 50+ to 5ish before they even start to look at your work history etc.
Absolutely the first thing they should be seeing is a list of clear successes. That’ll all you should really need to get interviews.
