Will Barron
Feb 9, 2024
Will Barron Feb 9, 2024

I made a copy of your doc and added some notes for you (highlighted) here –


Some notes –

  • I think you’ve done a decent job here but the emails seem a little generic. Is there a little more special sauce that only your organization has that we can sprinkle on top?
  • Double check grammar etc. I’m terrible at that stuff, so if I can find issues it’s worth running through an additional spellcheck before sending out.
  • Simplify everything. Every extra word you use increases the chance of the message getting lost in translation.
  • Be more specific in the person you’re placing/value being delivered/what the prospect is going to get out of working with you.

Hope that helps!