Hey Travis, I’ve moved your post over to the Asset Review section.
Some pointers –
- Email is way too long and has too many angles of content. Break it up into multiple, smaller emails.
- CTA sucks. If you’re emailing someone important, what are the chances they’re available at that time slot?
- No personalisation. It comes across as a mass marketing email.
Try this –
I spoke to [END USER] and they’re interested in using Generative AI in their development.
I’m connecting with software engineers across General Dynamics to help them build new products & experiences to drive 2023 business results.
There’s a couple of [JOB TITLE] who got a lot of value from a revenue Gartner sample resource.
Would it be useful for me to fire it over?