Hey James! Working with your colleagues internally is smart!
My feedback is that there is a lot of industry buzz words in there.
What are smart seeds?
How do you improve marketing performance (what metric? CTR? CPC? etc)
What data is being analysed?
I’m not sure what your product is (share a link if you want, I don’t think it’s against any rules) but a more layperson version could be…
“Our tool, helps digital advertisers improve their performance by testing more audiences in less time. “