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Will Barron
Keymaster
May 18, 2022
Will Barron May 18, 2022

Another version, that is to thwart “do nothing”

Our Roadmap for Customer Identity and Access Management (CIAM)
Helps enterprise digital executives
Who need to simplify user registration, login, and self-care
Create a business case and a low-risk plan to evolve to cloud identity, securely
To stay competitive in the cloud-era

Loads better!

I’d try “Our exclusive/bespoke/proven roadmap…” to make it less generic.

I don’t think this is very strong “Who need to simplify user registration, login, and self-care”.

Do they NEED to do this? Why do they need to do it?

I’d also get rid of “business case”. That’s already implied if they’re going to work with you.

Finally the last line I’d go with “To become more competitive in the…”. Who wants to stand still? We all want to move things forward.